Two scenes 3/18/2010 02:53
EXT. Harvard Yard. Sunny March Afternoon

A young girl, probably in her early twenties, is sitting over the grass in front of Lamont Library reading a novel.

Another woman, older, walks toward the young girl.

OLDER WOMAN
Excuse me.
The young girl looks up.

POV OLDER WOMAN, the young girl seems to be very absorbed into her book.

OLDER WOMAN
Excuse me. Do you mind to keep an eye on my
bag over there? I will go to use the bathroom
very quickly and be back.

YOUNGER WOMAN
Which one?
She turns to the direction the older woman points to and sees a bag over the steps behind her.
Sure.

The older woman walks in to the library. Fade out.

Fade in, the young girl is sitting over the steps right next to the older woman’s bag reading. The older woman walks close and the young girl doesn’t raise up her head.

OLDER WOMAN
Thank you. So are you in spring break?
The young woman stands up and now the two women are standing face to face.

YOUNG WOMAN
No, I am not a student.
OLDER WOMAN
Do you also escape from work to enjoy the sunshine?
YOUNG WOMAN
Oh, I don’t work. I am on disability leave.

The older woman looked at the young girl up and down and there is puzzle over her expression because the young girl looks perfectly normal to her.
YOUNG WOMAN
I have depression and anxiety disorder. They gave
me electric shots and medications so I can’t work.

The girl talks with a very soft voice, like a small kitten. The older woman is surprised as how ease the girl talks about the fact. Instead the older woman tries to hide her surprise and to find a right response.

Medium two-person shot from older woman’s pov.
OLDER WOMAN
Is it so bad? … How come? Is it because of a recent
life event or it is chemical imbalance?
Reverse shot of the girl now in medium shot. And we start to see her eyes – grayish pupils like a little kitten’s eyes, giving the impression of not quite focusing.
YOUNGER WOMAN
It is chemical imbalance.
Only voice from the older woman and the camera zooms in on the girls face.
OLDER WOMAN
Does this sunny day make you feel better?
Reframing to a close-shot of the girl’s face and her eyes become more prominent.
YOUNGER WOMAN
A little. I have to live with it.
OLDER WOMAN - POV
Is it bad to have the treatment and to depend on the
medicine? Have you tried other ways? Like travel?
Maybe, SNAP, you are good?
Eextreme-close-shot of the young gril’s two grey and semi-transparent eyes.
YOUNG WOMAN
I have had this since I was a child.

Cross dissolve.


INT. Café – DAY
Three women are sitting around a café table.
One woman (A) is telling her story about the two cats she recently adopted. The other two women are listening, one of whom is the OLDER WOMAN (O) from the previous scene, and another woman is C.
A
The pool little kittens, they were abused and rescued
by this animal center in Cambridge. One is very afraid
of the footsteps from upstairs. It makes her shaking
and hiding under the bed.

O
What happened?
A
I don’t know what kind of traumatic experience they had.
But they were abused before.
C toward A
You said that the shelter almost put them to death.
A
Yeah, because people don’t adopt them and the center
evaluated them and thought they may be unadoptable.

A close shot of O’s face. She is in a gaze that is not quite at the moment.
Cut to a shot of a small kitten with expression in her eyes similar as what O had seen in the Young Girl’s eyes. Cross dissolve from kitten's eyes and expression to the girls' eyes as flash-back.
O's Voice
I feel so bad about the girl I met. It feels like this is
the first time that she is human. Maybe just last life
she was a kitten and maybe even was abused. She was
so vulnerable, yet so brave to tell a stranger that she had
depression and anxiety disorder. This very braveness made
me think that she is simply naive and doesn’t belong to here.
She doesn’t seem to know that to survive in this society,
one has to learn to hide certain things. Her soul is so fresh.
I hope she meets people like you who can
offer a shelter for her this life, and maybe her soul will come
back stronger and stronger with each incarnation?

???????
花了半天时间格式化上面的文件.
结果一发送全部移到了左边靠齐.
咱们生活网的文件编辑器是不是该升级了?
还是我太苯了?
而且一返回, 原来的文件也没了.
wildcrane at 3/18/2010 02:57 快速引用
如果这是你的作品,那我 support 你多画画。
85232 at 3/18/2010 04:20 快速引用
wildcrane :
花了半天时间格式化上面的文件.
结果一发送全部移到了左边靠齐.
咱们生活网的文件编辑器是不是该升级了?
还是我太苯了?
而且一返回, 原来的文件也没了.


你试了用 等吗?
BostonChinese at 3/18/2010 09:23 快速引用
85232 :
如果这是你的作品,那我 support 你多画画。


为什么? 有那么差吗? smile

不是作品了. 昨天发生的事情. 本来正打算用日记的形式三言两语记个大概. 突然想, 还是记录下来情景地点对话. 和我后来突然感到她的灵魂好象不属于这里的联想 (她的眼睛, 和她的单纯脆弱). 算是原始材料(因为记录全部是真实对话没有编) 以后真写的时候可能会用上呢.

不过呢, 确实应该画画了, 好久没画, 觉已经很难睡了.
Intelletual/analytic 方面会压抑 intuitive/sensibility. 很难俩全.
wildcrane at 3/18/2010 09:27 快速引用
No really “inferior”, just personal preference:)

What I was trying to say is that when I looked at your paintings, my sights had not been limited by what was actually in the frame. My imagination was sparked by the spirit behind your works, as well as I had seen something from my previous life.

I was not able to find it from above.
85232 at 3/18/2010 22:26 快速引用
BostonChinese :
wildcrane :
花了半天时间格式化上面的文件.
结果一发送全部移到了左边靠齐.
咱们生活网的文件编辑器是不是该升级了?
还是我太苯了?
而且一返回, 原来的文件也没了.


你试了用 等吗?


她没有,我引用了一下,发现很多空格 狂笑 狂笑
开会 at 3/19/2010 00:21 快速引用
你是写剧本啊? support happy

提个小建议,人物的语言可以再个性化一点,现在读上去都是你在叙述 wink
开会 at 3/19/2010 00:25 快速引用
嗯,分镜头写的不错
人物语言的个性化嘛,可以靠表演的再创造
shaojiu at 3/19/2010 01:03 快速引用
开会 :
你是写剧本啊? support happy

提个小建议,人物的语言可以再个性化一点,现在读上去都是你在叙述 wink


是个改头换面的日记 oops Laughing

后面那件事发生在前面那件事前面 Laughing , 但因为晚上突然间有一个灵感, 感到她好象前一世的灵魂还是一只小鹿, 应该在草原上生存, 突然灵魂降到了这个物质繁华高楼大厦的人堆里, 焦虑恐惧抑郁, 与人身俱来.

我就是想记录下来她的眼神, 你分明看见的是一个小动物的眼神. 通过眼神你看到一个单纯不知所措受罪的灵魂被院囿在一个人的身体里. 她清纯美丽直率而毫无戒备, 不得不令人纳闷为什么.

但想起另一个故事, 小帽受虐待的故事, 有这感受上的相同之处, 一个身体错位灵魂受罪的故事.

如果将来真有机会发挥, 其实, 好多人都会有错位的感受了.
wildcrane at 3/19/2010 10:47 快速引用
BostonChinese :
wildcrane :
花了半天时间格式化上面的文件.
结果一发送全部移到了左边靠齐.
咱们生活网的文件编辑器是不是该升级了?
还是我太苯了?
而且一返回, 原来的文件也没了.


你试了用 等吗?


刚看见, 确实没有实验 oops
wildcrane at 3/19/2010 10:49 快速引用
85232 :
No really “inferior”, just personal preference:)

What I was trying to say is that when I looked at your paintings, my sights had not been limited by what was actually in the frame. My imagination was sparked by the spirit behind your works, as well as I had seen something from my previous life.

I was not able to find it from above.


谢谢你对我画画的鼓励. rose
我确实每天都在挣扎, 上完全职的工作, 本来还有一点点时间画画.
现在又上俩门课, 反而一点点时间都很难找出来.
虽然上课是因为我萌发了想拿一个视觉艺术的学位,
但为了学位又不得不上一些跟画画没关系的课. 怪圈哈?

不过我还是打算坚持下去, 最多在一年的牺牲. 今年夏天我有一个月可以使劲画. 也许把压抑着的能量释放出来时画得会更好happy

其次, 这俩年通过坚持不断的努力, 英文写作提高了许多. 对自己和别人都要有耐心.

坚持就是胜利. Success
wildcrane at 3/19/2010 10:55 快速引用
shaojiu :
嗯,分镜头写的不错
人物语言的个性化嘛,可以靠表演的再创造


我也是这么想来着.

昨天我就想, 再真正找到能给人这种感觉的人和眼神, 很难啊.
还是一件不太好重复的事.
wildcrane at 3/19/2010 10:59 快速引用
美好的脆弱的很需要保护的吗?我倒是很支持古人的想法呢,救急不救穷。美好的经历风雨,才能更加蓬勃发展的。

你描述的那个女孩,让我想起了indigo child。我就搜索了一下,看看有没有那方面的新动向,结果发现wikipedia的描述非常负面的呢。
WoJian at 3/19/2010 11:29 快速引用
不过我还是打算坚持下去, 最多在一年的牺牲. 今年夏天我有一个月可以使劲画. 也许把压抑着的能量释放出来时画得会更好happy

support


其次, 这俩年通过坚持不断的努力, 英文写作提高了许多. 对自己和别人都要有耐心.

坚持就是胜利. Success[/quote]

欣赏作品是件很主观的事,希望你加油 Success
85232 at 3/19/2010 16:28 快速引用
85232 :
不过我还是打算坚持下去, 最多在一年的牺牲. 今年夏天我有一个月可以使劲画. 也许把压抑着的能量释放出来时画得会更好happy

support


其次, 这俩年通过坚持不断的努力, 英文写作提高了许多. 对自己和别人都要有耐心.

坚持就是胜利. Success


欣赏作品是件很主观的事,希望你加油 Success[/quote]

smile 谢谢。

不能所有时候都要求我出的是作品。要允许我胡乱诌几句,和瞎玩儿一下嘛。

不过不止你一个人告诉我回去画画,感觉我干别的事情实在浪费时间,我自己也挣扎。到底是要这个学位不画画,还是画画不要这个学位。

我其实自己也很难受,通过思考出来的东西怎么都不能达到用直接创作出来的东西的过瘾。而且我是一个理性的怀疑论者。所以常常自己问自己瞎忙乎的意义。

已经难受到每天晚上梦见各种画,包括动画,醒来得去上班不能实现。现在压抑良久,已经开始有失眠症了。可是这个周末还得写文章。

结论:我要是不用上班就好了 狂笑
wildcrane at 3/19/2010 16:43 快速引用
是你的粉丝才当作品看得嘛

八一句,画画和学位的关系是什莫?

画画就没学位 or 有学位就能画画?
85232 at 3/19/2010 16:54 快速引用
85232 :
是你的粉丝才当作品看得嘛

八一句,画画和学位的关系是什莫?

画画就没学位 or 有学位就能画画?



这个问题我也没搞清。将来的用处是什么?

但眼下,上我全职的工作,在上俩们课(不是画画课),阅读,学习,写作,完成作业之后,你想还有时间画画吗?我已经累死了。
wildcrane at 3/19/2010 16:57 快速引用
那画画的用处是什莫?
85232 at 3/19/2010 17:04 快速引用
85232 :
那画画的用处是什莫?


不知道啊。画画完了感觉特别好。

写作和读书看电影玩乐也高兴,但没法和画画比。
我想可能一个更直接一个是智力活动吧?当然人和人不一样,有的人可能就是写东西最高兴,看电影最高兴?

你这样问我,让我突然纳闷,那不画画的人都不难受啊?
wildcrane at 3/19/2010 17:09 快速引用
你个我很大启示了。
我争取这个周末无论如何胡乱画也得画店什么了 rose
wildcrane at 3/19/2010 17:14 快速引用
wildcrane :
85232 :
那画画的用处是什莫?


不知道啊。画画完了感觉特别好。

写作和读书看电影玩乐也高兴,但没法和画画比。
我想可能一个更直接一个是智力活动吧?当然人和人不一样,有的人可能就是写东西最高兴,看电影最高兴?

你这样问我,让我突然纳闷,那不画画的人都不难受啊?


不画画啊,逛街吧,买房吧,去教会吧,生小孩吧...

为什莫一定要是智力活动呢?
85232 at 3/19/2010 17:14 快速引用
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